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= Original Paragraph = Nobody truly knows how far Macondo is from civilization. In the expedition to find signs of civilization, the truth becomes a daunting nightmare to these men. Words such as “damp” “silence” “volcanic ash” and “thick vegetation” shows how Marquez is able to demonstrate the feeling of desolation and darkness. This swamp like region is what lies between Macondo and the other civilizations. The raw and natural characteristics of this land give the men a realization that their small town’s solitude is greater than they could have imagined. Words such as “universe,” “remote,” and “enchanted region” give no true dimensions of this area. In this fashion, the men feel as though the swamps are endless and vast beyond easy navigation. The fact that the men have not found any “appreciable obstacle” shows the enduring task of finding the slightest sign of civilization.

Revised for Style Nobody truly knows how far Macondo is from civilization. In the expedition to find signs of civilization, the truth becomes a daunting nightmare to these men. **Initially**, the “damp” ground, looking “like volcanic ash” seemingly overwhelms the men, who, early on in their travels, didn’t find “any appreciable obstacle.” **As the passage continues**, they encounter a region that is “remote.” The journey, **in this situation,** reveals to Jose’s crew that what lies before them is desolate. **Thereafter**, the men realize that the raw and natural characteristics of this land continue to increase their solitude. “Universe” and “enchanted,” **for example**, suggest a diminishing sense of the true dimensions of this area, resulting in some mystically vast place without beginning or end. **In this fashion**, the men feel as though the swamps are endless and vast beyond navigation.